It's Not Where You Start Fanfic Workblog

So I finally managed to poop out another chapter! Still probably a lot of room for improvement and change but I think this helps get at the main meat of the story a little better. Still sort of dancing around what exactly the androids are for and such but we'll get there. Hopefully it's just interesting and not antagonizing. :P Chapter 6 Frieza was not a patient man. Smoke tendrils dispersed through the air at the end of an expensively rolled, lit cigarette. It had been several months since the Kold family had last had direct contact with Dr. Gero and the lack of communication sat raw on his nerves. His orders had been fairly straight forward: create cyborgs that he could control. He could only afford to threaten, bribe, and kill so many people before it caught up with him. It initially hadn’t been a problem to do as he pleased but a certain Yakuza prince had been snooping. Vegeta had been more quiet than usual before Frieza sent him to monitor Dr. Gero and whe...

Here's chapter one after some revisions. I'm going to skip all the author's notes and just use the format requested by the creative writing class teacher I'm attending. It just makes things easier if all I have to do is copy/paste. :p It’s Not Where You Start Chapter 1 “You’re going Vegeta, that’s final.” Frieza said. Two men, one older and one younger, argued passionately in Japanese. Vegeta did not like where this conversation was going from the beginning and certainly did not like where it was trying to end. Hissing through clenched teeth, he defied his legal guardian. “I’m. Not. Going.” He stated, punctuating each syllable with passion. “Vegeta, I only called you here to tell you as a courtesy.” The more effeminate looking of the two men, known as Frieza, gently pinched the bridge of his arrogantly shaped nose. “You’re the only one I can trust to go who will produce results.” He tried cajoling the stoic young man. If you can’t use force, h...